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11/05/16 00:25
전체적으로 구조는 잘 잡으신 것 같아요. 세세한 문법은 저도 잘 몰라서 어느 게 맞다 말씀은 못 드리겠고
첫 문단만 제 생각대로 조금 바꿔 보았어요. I have some unfavorable characteristics which look somewhat unattractive. At first, I am narrow-minded. When I was 17 years old, I went to Seoul Land with my friends. They teased me just for fun in soft manner. I got hurted, however, and return to my home immediately without any notice. That my small-minded action made my friends very embarrased.
11/05/16 01:18
저도 영어 못하지만 토익공부하다가 배운걸루다가 조금만 말씀드려요.
두번째 문단에서 think+ about 보다는 think 목적어 of ~ 또는 think 목적어 as ~를 쓰는것같고, 두번째줄엔 스타크래프트를 즐기기 때문에 피씨방에 간다(인과관계)보다는 즐기기 위해서(for)가 맞는거 같고.. 세번째줄은 I decided not to go ~로 시작하는게 문법에 맞는거 같습니다. 또는 I decided (that) I would not ~으로요. 그리고 But은 문장 앞에는 잘 안쓰니, 같은의미의 However,로 바꾸는게 맞겠네요.
11/05/16 08:56
둘째 문단부터 고쳐볼께요!
Secondly, I consider myself to be a impatient person. For instance, when I was addicted to starcraft, I went to PC room to play it every single day. Because I wasted much money and time due to it, I resolved to stop going to PC room for a month. However, I couldn't make it, and a few days later, I became a professional gamer of starcraft. Lastly, I skip a meal frequently. I don't eat anything if I don't feel like eating regardless of the food served to me, such as a pizza or a hamburger. (이부분 문장 해석이 잘 안되서 맞게 썼나 잘 모르겠네요;;죄송..) In conclusion, I need to correct my bad characteristics(habit 이 어떨까 싶기도 하네요!) immediately. 중간 중간 좀 바꾼 부분이 있어서 어떻게 보실진 모르겠네요; 스피킹을 위한 준비 같아 보이는데 맞나요? 마지막 결론에 한문장 정도 더 추가하면 어떨까 싶네요! 그리고 첫번째 문단에서 I went to seoul land 를 앞으로 배치시키고 when문장을 뒤로하는게 자연스러워 보여요, 열심히 하세요!!
11/05/16 17:30
우선 피씨방은 영어로 Internet cafe 라고 해서 그걸로 바꿨어요
윗분들이 쓰신거 참고해서 수정한거니까 또 수정할꺼 있으면 알려주세요 크크 I have some unfavorable habits which look somewhat unattractive. At first, I am narrow-minded. When I was 17, I went to the Seoul Land with my friends. They teased me just for fun in a soft manner. I felt hurt So,I returned home immediately without any notice. that day, my small-minded action made my friends very embarrased. second of all, I consider myself as an impatient person. For instance,I went to an internet cafe every single day to play star craft, when I was addicted to it. Realizing that I wasted much money and time, I decided to stop playing star craft for a month. However, I couldn't keep my word, few days later,I became a professional gamer. for the last, I skip a meal frequently. Eventhough there are delicious foods such as pizza or hamburger. I eat nothing until I feel awful hunger. 마지막꺼는 고르세요 전 1번이 좋은데. 시간 때우셔야하면 긴게 좋으니까요. 1)In conclusion,I need to fix and exterminate my bad habits immediately. 2)In conclusion,I need to fix my bad habits immediately. and need prompt effort to stop my bad habits. 한번 썼다가 지워졌어요 T-T 함께 열심히 하자구요-흐흐
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